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I like it. Could you fix the prooperty spelling error on the front page (Utah Constitution) and the "Your Right to Bear Arms" page? I haven't read through it all, but I noticed that one real fast off the bat. Also, would you be willing to post the editable file (word, publisher, etc) as well for us to manipulate?

Thanks for the great reference!
 

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Here's another one, on the second page under Utah Self Defense Laws your second main paragraph reads:

"Be sure to the rest of section 402 in order to better understand justification of force."

Should probably say Be sure to READ the rest . . .

Looks good!
 

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Looks very good as a draft. Good job!

It does need a bit of proof-reading and editing. Please know that I'm not trying to be critical. You've put together an excellent pamphlet. I know that I like to ask somebody else besides me to proofread a document that I've written, because the author often doesn't see the errors. An independent proofreader can be very valuable. With that in mind, I have some corrections to suggest:

There is no word "prooperty" in Article I, Section 6 of the Utah Constitution. This is what it really says:
The individual right of the people to keep and bear arms for security and defense of self, family, others, property, or the state, as well as for other lawful purposes shall not be infringed; but nothing herein shall prevent the Legislature from defining the lawful use of arms.
Prooperty shows up twice in the document.

I would take minor issue with the wording in the 2nd page, first paragraph.
I would say keep and bear arms, instead of just bear arms. They mean two quite different things and both are mentioned in both constitutions. The title "Creator" should be capitalized out of respect (as is customary). Both the U.S. and Utah constitutions protect the right to keep and bear arms, but I wouldn't say that the Federal or State Governments do so. They (especially Federal) are often working hard to infringe those rights, so I would suggest a bit of rewording in this paragraph.

Second page, middle column, second paragraph should say, "Be sure to read the rest of section 402 in order to better understand justification of force."

First page, first column, fifth paragraph should probably be modified to read, "Anybody over the age of 18, with a clean criminal record, can own a firearm. You have to be over 21 to purchase a handgun from a licensed dealer, but only 18 to own (and carry unloaded) a handgun."

First page, middle column, third paragraph, should say "buses", not "busses". Might want to spell check the whole document.

First page, middle column, fourth paragraph: The prohibition from carrying in an airport only applies to the sterile area, i.e past the security checkpoints. Just some clarification.

As I said before, good job! I added one of your links to my Handy Links thread. :crown:
 

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Porter rockwell was kinda of a monster by the way...

Not everything you here on Sunday is accurate...
 

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wild cat,

Is your comment meant for a different thread? If not, could you clarify as to how it pertains to this thread? Thanks!
 

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hahaha, I swear some day dyslexia will be my ruin.
 

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I am working on cleaning up the few spelling and grammar mistakes. The website that I copied and pasted the section of the Utah Constitution had the spelling "prooperty", so I missed it! I will have the second copy posted later this week!

Regarding the editable version... I am creating it in Adobe InDesign (CS2), I would be happy to email it to anyone by request.

Email me at [email protected] to request the .indd file.
 

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wild cat mccane said:
Porter rockwell was kinda of a monster by the way...

Not everything you here on Sunday is accurate...
Most of what I know about him comes from history books, not Sunday School. I see him as more of a Wild West figure than a church figure.

That said, I have been thinking of taking the picture/quote off and replacing it with something more political/positive...
 

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Wow, that download thing is a joke!!!

That being said, Scotty, as soon as you are "complete" with it and authorize it as a "final copy" I'll host it for you if you'd like -- just let me know when it's ready.

Otherwise, it looks great! I haven't proof-read it yet though, just skimmed it.
 

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np... might as well do SOMETHING with all my space...
 

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